Rise to Leadership 5

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The story cont's- Dachande took the blow full force and hit the ground hard, he clicked his exposed mandibles in anger! The Reaper closed in swiftly, wanting to tear Dachande apart very dearly...

But Dachande was fast, he ignored the pain he suffered, grabbing the inner jaw and used his right knee to keep the jaws opening even wider. He clenched his fist, preparing to deal with this hardmeat once and for all....


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